This is a good start. Here are some thoughts to consider in revising this messy draft. In general, try to organize things so they fgollow naturally one upon another: 1) Consider making their fight about buying a house about a theoreeticl house, and put it before their visit to the Poconos. 2) When you introduce their going to the Poconos, say right away that they are going to look for a house. 3) Put the part about their finding the house after their visit to the real estate agent’s in the Poconos. 4) Perhaps have something strange happen when the agent shows them their dream home–not something outlandish like a metreor but something creepy and uncomfortable–or perhaps even where they learn something unexpected about each other that they hadn’t known before, based on something they find at the house they are loooking at . . . 5) in general I think the meteor idea is too outlandish and unrealistic to fit within the story you are telling!
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